Introducing HIS FIRST TIME, the first book in a hot new series by D.E. Lorrin... "No. It's good that you're getting out of this town. Why did you think I'd be mad? This is a black hole, Bryce. It's good that you got the momentum to get out." He murmured. Bryce was quiet a moment "Why don't you come with me?" There has always been something "different" about Bryce. AlthoughIntroducing HIS FIRST TIME, the first book in a hot new series by D.E. Lorrin... "No. It's good that you're getting out of this town. Why did you think I'd be mad? This is a black hole, Bryce. It's good that you got the momentum to get out." He murmured. Bryce was quiet a moment "Why don't you come with me?" There has always been something "different" about Bryce. Although he was able to guard himself and fit-in his whole life, he's now about to embark on a journey of self-discovery...he's going to college. The small town he came from has been restricting him for too long. The big college town will allow Bryce the freedom to be himself. Something he hasn't been able to do his whole life. But, in doing so, he's leaving behind the only friend that ever "got" him...aspiring artist, Liam. What will Bryce do with his new freedom? How will his roommate react to him? What will happen to Liam? Find Out Now!...
|Title||:||his first time|
|Format Type||:||Kindle Edition|
|Number of Pages||:||23 Pages|
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his first time Reviews
This felt like porn without plot fanfiction. Which would be okay if it was fanfiction but it was not. And thus I am disappointed. The characters were so flat, the plot seemed to have a lot of threads that were immediately dropped upon being mentioned, and the sex was meh. I also am not a fan of the idea that Jake was described as being "kind of Indian" and that being enough. Like wtf is that.I will not be picking up the next installment and would recommend just staying away from this in general.Read this as part of the #ReadProud Challenge.Books and Ladders | Queen of the Bookshelves | Books Are My Fandom | Twitter | Instagram | Bloglovin'
I've read bad stories in my life... Vampire Slayer being one of them. Well, this is even worse. At least the writer of Vampire Slayer did have a working management of the rules of grammar and composition. This story is in desperate need of editing. The whole thing needs editing. Aside from the profuse occurence of typos, the construction of each paragraph and sentence was painful. You kneóow a text is bad when the 95% of the paragraphs start with "Bryce" or "He" or "The blond man" or "Jake". Right, and when the paragraph doesn't start with any of the afore mentioned, worry not: plenty of sentences in the paragraph will. And this is not a mistake induced by, perhaps, a poor knowledge of English, it's a mistake in composition. It's often seen in fanfiction, but we let those slide, because, come on, it's fanfiction. This, however, isn't.Anyway, after struggling through the horrendous grammar and composition display, and the bunny-like proliferation of typos (hell, get a beta-reader!), we've got to the plot. Except that there isn't any sort of plot. So here's the "plot" for you: meet Bryce, some guy from Kansas, from church, possibly from a very religious background though that's not quite clear, who has an artistic, tattoed friend, Liam, who may or may not be in love with him. It is said that Bryce is in love with Liam. Not much evidence of that offered. Liam stays in Kansas while Bryce is off to college - oh right, apparently he has a scholarship with something related to some game playing - where he'll study... that's probably not important. What's important is that he has a short, dark skinned roommate, Jake, who might be "Indian", though who knows, since Bryce suspects he is and that's enough. Jake takes Bryce to a place where people is going crazy shopping. Might or might not be Black Friday, you never get to know. It seems that Bryce gets anxious - it seems Bryce has some crowd anxiety problems, but it's never really developped. He does play a team sport, which probably will make him play before crowds, and since his major isn't mentioned, he might be out to play in whatever major division or big league, which again conflicts with his aparent anxiety issues - which is convenient, because being that apparently Bryce has always been in the closet, and whether or not keeping it so (he says he's there to explore his sexuality, but strongly avoids showing his attraction to Jake), Jake comes looking for him, go back to their room and have sex.Jake wants to be something else - just in so many words, don't think there's actual story development for it - Bryce is afraid and wants to keep it a secret, but then they casually have more sex. Liam videocalls Bryce one night, realizes what Bryce is doing with Liam, Bryce feels bad, and ... um... they keep doing it? Yeah, grammar isn't helping much to get that part. Anyway, it seems that Jake tricks Bryce into outing himself to his team and... hey, wanna know what comes next? Buy the next instalment?So glad I had this thing for $0,00, because sure as hell I don't want to read the rest. Or I'd be out on a killing spree for whatever amount of money tricked out of me with this waste of words.
Poorly writtenThis story has a great concept but between the poor grammar and the jumping around form scene to scene it wasn't worth the short read. The beginning had a lot of potential and I thought it was leading to the storyline of returning home because Bryce was speaking of Liam in the past tense then all of a sudden they are in the present tense and having an argument? And by the way where does the social anxiety disorder portion come from? Just all of a sudden small town boy has anxiety but while he's moving into his dorm an the first day which would be absolutely packed and definitely an anxiety ridden experience he's perfectly fine? Yeah, I think not. Needless to say I will not be reading the rest of this "series".
The firstI gave this 3*'s mainly because this book is an introduction of the characters and their issues. I am sure the story will get better in book 2. Bryce certainly has a lot of firsts. Very small town boy to big city college is bound to scare anyone. Unfortunately his naive self couldn't hear the warning bells about moving to quickly into a sexual situation with Jake. That boy seriously set him up....he intentionally opened that window.....